One beautiful day, an old man named Johnnie loved dogs he wore glasses and lived in Germany.He was a scientist who wanted to build a machine that turned people into dogs. Johnnie was seventy three years old, rich and famous for his inventions that he had made over the past twenty years. Johnnie had been working on the invention for five months now. Each day the dog machine keeped on breaking. Johnnie has two boys who are twins.They are both seventeen years old.After one month Johnnie perfectied his invention . Johnnie latrily terend himself into a dog…So the dog wore glasses…
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Kia Ora Seth. This is a wonderful piece of writing. You have included lots of description which makes your work really interesting to read. This story made me think about other famous inventions and how hard the inventors must have worked to perfect them! Well done Seth, keep up the great writing.
Heidi (Team 100, New Zealand).
I like how you have an adjective in you second word of the whole thing from George
Cool! Remember your spelling.🐆🐅🦌🦊
I hope he enjoys his time being a dog🐶. Grace.
Hi Seth,
great write you know Jonny is spelt like this Jonny.
From Jaxon.
That is a very good story, but there should be a comma at the start after dogs and before he.
Abrielle